My favorite English mystery writer is Peter Lovesey so I was saddened by his recent announcement that his newest novel, Against the Grain, would be his last. His first was the prize-winning Wobble to Death, and it was published 50 years ago! Wow! He will at least continue writing short stories and I look forward to reading them. It was his novel, The Vault, that first taught me the value of a great opening line.
"Some weird objects are handed in at Bath Police Station."
I don't know about you, but I cannot stop there. Like what? What sort of weird object? Is he going to give me an example? He had better, because I feel like I HAVE to know! It can't be a gun because it's a police station and a gun would not be a weird thing to hand in there. A purse? That's not weird either. A set of false teeth? Weird, but why would you take them to a police station? I have to know more.
I read further, of course, and learn that a man wearing the uniform of a guide at the city's main tourist attraction, the famous Roman Baths, is standing in line at the front desk and holding a pizza box with a lump in it. The lid won't go all the way down.
What's in the box? I'll pause while you think about that.
I read on until I found out what was in the box but by that time I was hooked. I had to read the rest of the story.
Another Lovesey story--and I can't remember its name--starts with the single word, "Naked?" I thought about how I couldn't stop reading there and was inspired to start my first Dotsy Lamb Travel Mystery, set in Italy, with "Strip-search?" It worked. A lot of people read the book.
First lines are important. First lines in a mystery are especially important because there are so many mysteries out there. The writer is facing stiff competition. Nobody has to read past the first line if they don't want to. You have to make them want to. Here are some of my favorites:
"Last night I dreamt I went to Manderley again." Rebecca, Daphne du Maurier. This line is often quoted as a great first sentence.
"I have done this before." Poirot's Last Case, Agatha Christie
"Death is my beat." The Poet, Michael Connelly
"Eunice Parchman killed the Coverdale family because she could not read or write." A Judgement in Stone, Ruth Rendell.
A first line like this one, or the one from The Vault can be used to spark the reader's curiosity or it can be used to set the mood for the whole story. It can help the reader decide if he wants to spend a few hours living in the world you have invented.
What about you? Have you ever been captivated by the first word or a first line that grabbed you and made you read the whole thing? When was the last time you felt like Tom Cruise when he said, "You had me at Hello?"
I'd love to hear your answer. Leave me a comment.